m fabian success: Blog Entry 14

m fabian success: Blog Entry 14: Bottled Water Myth Versus Reality The myth of “bottled water is safer than tap water “, the reality is that with the bott...


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In this tutoring session i was paired with two of the students i had in the previous session, I walked in and began asking about the assignment on fast food advertisements, one student had the practice test handed back so i began with her. I was amazed to see her progress, she was very nervous the first session i met her, but improved on so many different levels. The overall qualification of her exam was passing and she had the rating 4 on structure, formation and ideas. So as i started reading over her paper, i noticed that she had some clear ideas, such as how parents want to fight back against obesity, all that needed to be done is be more specific in  the introduction. While i had her write details about how fast food advertisements were portrayed, i switched over to the other student. This student hammered away until he found the specific areas that he would be mentioning in the body paragraph, but he failed to provide a clear introduction that would support what he had to say about the matrix. I tried multiple tricks such as looping, and talking out loud, but the student just seemed unsure of the topic and was very perplexed. I seem to have some sort of trouble when it comes to dealing with thesis development because, i usually put a lot of effort into my thesis. At certain times in the session i really had no clue what to do, i followed the book, but without him having a clear understanding of the text it flopped. So i went back into areas that i thought were strong such as Neo's education and attempt to find an answer and started building on those areas.


First student (Girl)

Suggestions- You want to mention how company's, such as the bureau have advanced in their mission to provide healthier advertisements. When you are able to connect these ideas, you can then tie it to the actions that parents are taking to prevent obesity, such as healthy cooking.

Second Student (Boy)

Suggestions- When you go into the Matrix you want to clearly state who you're going to be talking about to support your opinion. Those characters Neo and Cypher support your opinion that people have different perspectives on knowledge.

In this tutoring session i was extremely confident about tutoring because i was eager to redeem myself. In this session i worked with two students, the first student was having trouble finding a topic because the assignment was confusing, while the second student needed help organizing his paper. The first student was nervous about his introduction because he knew it was crucial. I used some of the methods that was addressed in the book, such as What is the assignment? and Do you have a subject? The student pulled out the assignment which looked extremely long and grueling, but broke it down in a matter of seconds. His eyes were so glued to the screen, so i wanted to use the strategy talk out loud. I had the student face me and talk about some of the ideas that he wanted to incorporate in his assignment. As he was speaking i was writing on Microsoft word and showed him them afterwards. I found out his problem was not the thesis in general, but just the overall formation, so i taught him how to make an outline. Shortly after i moved to another student, he seemed very uneasy, but his paper taught me about history with dictators. The student had trouble tying his ideas back to his thesis, which contributed to the splurge of ideas on his paper. I went through each paragraph piece by piece, and noticed he could use some quotations to support his ideas. The student was very in tune to his felt sense, but he just needed to support his claim by using the key word Education! Overall he had some minor LOC's, but it did not affect the clarity of his work. Both students were very calm and easygoing, which helped make the tutoring session smooth and best of all i was not NERVOUS!