eng103: Revised Diagnostic: Malcolm X, being the amazing speaker and thinker that he was, presented many innovative ideas to the black community in h...
This is a great start to the diagnostic essay. As i started reading i noticed a strong use of vocabulary used in a correct manner to analyze the type of person Malcolm X is known for. It was particularly interesting as your topic dived deep into the oppressive situations that blacks had to undergo. You express a deep understanding of how he spoke out against discrimination and to how Malcolm X tipped the revolutionary scale. What i would suggest improving is the structure of your piece. You express such strong ideas, but you fail to back it up with details such as this sentence "Malcolm X, being the amazing speaker and thinker that he was, presented many innovative ideas to the black community in his time ". You need to go back into this sentence and break down the ideas into a sequence. Not to mention you need to include a quotation that supports your idea. Other than that its a great start and your opinion is very well rounded i hope you keep it up and don't be discouraged.
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