Factory Food: From Farm to Fridge: What really goes on behind the closed doors of modern farms? In my blog, with the help of a short video, I will delve into the path of how t...
Hi my name is Aaron, after reading your paper not to mention watching the video myself you provide a clear understanding of what you want to address in your blog concerning animal abuse. I would in fact change the order of your essay because your ideas seem to be all over the place. You could use the introduction as the way food was produced in modern times, and then transition into how it has become an evil corporation based on the almighty dollar. You had the right idea about the how you stated the order of animals based on the video so i would suggest keeping that. So while you provide the ideals of animals, you should expand more on your quotations such as the electric vats and give an analysis on how you feel. If you believe this action is wrong express it by demonstrating your feelings toward the subject matter. On another note i learned alot about CAFO just by reading your paper.
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